Notes on editing

Guys, while you left for Hollywood I went through out final practise shoot edited sequence and have noted down major elements we left out that makes our piece not make sense and flow properly. I also got feedback from ms dymioti:

• Missing shot
• Turning of the radio and looking at the shed then leaving- he doesn't actually turn of the radio it just stops after the news announcement
• Shot of the camera leaving the shed and sliding across the floor
• Need more CU of in shed -eyes-cut between each look
• Polaroids!
• Reaction shot of toast popping
• CU of eyes looking at shed

Suggestions

Say news date at the start of the radio announcement- because he is OCD wouldn't he know exactly when the news would be on and let music play after as he walked to turn off the radio